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Unregistered(d)	Heaven's Lament	Lead	[-]
Posts: 0 Sep 18 03 4:04 PM More My Recent Posts	Tags : None Heaven tears pour mournfully Torrential, sporadic, steady sorrow Overflowing, renting the clouds Unnoticed Until the sinner stood waist deep in a swirling dirge Only then did he look up Only then did he become concerned Worry wrinkled his brow with concertation Fear confused him mind as the drops pelted his face Nudged from complacency by a need to survive Heaven mourns and cannot be comforted Her children have forsaken her, abandoned her and they contemplate it not, nor do their hearts remind And so she mourns And shall mourn Until all are swept away with the cleansing flood.
BabyGoth1320	Love this Dulci :)	#1	[-]
Posts: 96 Sep 18 03 4:46 PM Druid More My Recent Posts	This is wonderful, great to see you writing again. I think there i something lyrical about this, i can hear the rain's incessant beat and want to dance and sing. Loved it. Steve
Unregistered(d)	And I saw two typos! Yikes!	#2	[-]
Posts: 0 Sep 18 03 8:33 PM More My Recent Posts	It is "heaven's tears" and "fear confused his mind" sorry about that! And thanks Stevie! Your a sweet friend!
Catsworld	Re: Heaven's Lament	#3	[-]
Posts: 7814 Sep 19 03 12:10 AM Handmaiden More My Recent Posts	Hi Dulcie, You can always edit the typos. It made me think of Noah's Ark...enjoyed reading this Lament. Leny
Unregistered(d)	Hey Leny!	#4	[-]
Posts: 0 Sep 19 03 8:47 PM More My Recent Posts	Thank you very much, but no, I can't edit, I don't have the capability. Used to have an edit button, but not anymore. So I just have to point it out in another post. Thanks!
Unregistered(d)	Re: Hey Leny!	#5	[-]
Posts: 0 Sep 19 03 9:32 PM More My Recent Posts	I love that word - concertation! I don't know if it is a real word or not - if not, it should be. Well done, as always! :-0
Catsworld	Re: edit button	#6	[-]
Posts: 7814 Sep 19 03 11:54 PM Handmaiden More My Recent Posts	Dulcie, it might be because you are posting as an unregistered user. When you are a member (again), you probably get back the edit button. If you prefer not to, I could edit for you, and remove the typos.
Unregistered(d)	Thank you Carly	#7	[-]
Posts: 0 Sep 22 03 12:11 PM More My Recent Posts	Yeah, it is my own concoction. Sort of a play on words and a combination of disconcert and concernment. I am glad you like it! Thanks for taking the time to read! Leny, I thought I did register. Do I have to pay money is that it? Thanks!
Dulcinea001	Okay	#8	[-]
Posts: 16 Sep 22 03 12:29 PM More My Recent Posts	I redid it, only had to add the 001 since I already have Dulcinea. Let see if this works. yep...got an edit button for the time being.

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